x3wendy Posted December 20, 2008 Share Posted December 20, 2008 12/20/08 [original] edited.Seems like I've been posting a lot towards the end of the year. I don't know if that's a good or bad thing- you tell me. I wrote two verses, and covered them, but I'm still missing a chorus. If you want to hop on, just give me a PM or msg me if you have my information. I rerecorded the second verse with a different attitude, and attempted my first. {The lyrics are weird. To be honest, I hate the first verse. } I'm still messing with the flow, so I'm also altering lyrics as I go. It may seem awkward at places, but if you guys point it out that would be great. It's not finalized, unless I feel lazy about it and don't feel like rerecording. Behind the scene: I was sort of upset with my parents about college stuff so that's why I wrote this. Afterward, I felt like it sounded weird to "rap" about college. So, I changed it up so it seemed like "college" was a person. (Hence the last four lines of verse 2) I really didn't like that part, but I just threw anything in. And... I should stop talking now. Happy Listening~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
andsharonx Posted December 20, 2008 Share Posted December 20, 2008 wendyyyyyy *save* edit:// aww it sounds good ^^ i like the lyrics. and you sound so sweet and girly <3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest jzsun Posted December 20, 2008 Share Posted December 20, 2008 i love your tone here! and the lyrics are so nice ~ <3333 it sounds sorta messy though >___<;; which i guess is because you're not enunciating? or like... dragging some words? wahhh T____T SO INNOCENT AND PURE <3 GIMME ~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest jaeners Posted December 20, 2008 Share Posted December 20, 2008 i willllllllllllll bbl to edit this...just because! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest o6.91 Posted December 21, 2008 Share Posted December 21, 2008 wahhh T____T SO INNOCENT AND PURE <3 coughhcoughcough i love ittt~ all your huge words & long sentences cheesyy too hahaha feel better love <3 im here Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
x3wendy Posted December 21, 2008 Author Share Posted December 21, 2008 andsharonx; ty- lol not anymore :X jzsun; yeah, i was messing with the echo and the layering. i edited my first post and clip :] not as innocent. and i'm still working on it cause i'm not satisfied yet. __Nae; pshhh! quit hating, all you did was "fly-y-y-y-y-y-y" while I was writing this. USELESS. Just kidding<3 edited first post :] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JaeMinluvr85 Posted December 21, 2008 Share Posted December 21, 2008 you wrote that??/ it s realy good! although i wish your voice was a bit louder wendy youre awesome Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest kAPEESH Posted December 21, 2008 Share Posted December 21, 2008 WOMAN YOU RAP SO FAST, YOU GIVIN ME A HEADACHEEE! lol keeding<3. its nice. as always, GG! your rapping skills are faaabuloso. you sound girlier here. hahah no G mode this time. & aw what did your parents do to you?! its your dad isnt it xO lol. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest SweetsLove Posted December 21, 2008 Share Posted December 21, 2008 Wooo wendy this is awesome. You sound really goood x] Hurry up and finish it so I can hear the rest!! I wish I could rap P: teach me!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bivue Posted December 21, 2008 Share Posted December 21, 2008 hey! i like the beat and the whole thing. but yeah...you could work on the lyrics a bit more. do i sound mean?? cuz i don't mean to be. good luck with this song! i hope you finish it. cuz if you do, i will definitely come back and listen to the full version! hwaiting!! . Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Raix Posted December 22, 2008 Share Posted December 22, 2008 wendyyy. man, been too long <3 =) where's the instrumental from, it's very pretty, and...sobre. WHOA the beat just slams in thats so awesome xD Your rapping has improved so much since the last time i listened to you. The attitude is awesome. You trip over your words a bit though which makes you lose your flow, just keep shooting the words out, so its more definite. Okay, I'm making no sense xDD Love the whisper part in the second verse. I like this a lot. I think a little adjustment to the lyrics so it fits better would be good, but otherwise <3 duuuuuuuuuude. you rawk ahahaah Could I hop on? =o Doing the chorus =x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest EHNerJI Posted December 22, 2008 Share Posted December 22, 2008 whaaa i'm envious XDD i can't write lyrics for my life XD they come out sounding overly corny or emo ._.; so you rock <333 i like it (: i'd offer to do chorus but.. -fails- XDD keep writing ;3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest xxzone2zonexx Posted December 22, 2008 Share Posted December 22, 2008 DAMN! it sounds deep..and nice lyrics.. FINISH IT NOW Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest o6.91 Posted December 22, 2008 Share Posted December 22, 2008 O: cause it IS fly-y-y-y-y-y. (hahaha they blocked out the word. i'll just say it to you personally via msn) HMPH/ aww, did i ever hear this? lol i like this oneeeeeee attitude~ cant compete with your essay-verses. haha fly-y-y-y-y-y okay stops* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest double_love123 Posted December 22, 2008 Share Posted December 22, 2008 OH.EM.GEE WENDY SEXINESS MUCH <3 &♥ JJ - 「14」'You wannabe Kore... Wait, you ARE Korean' ILY <3님의 말: OHEMGEE &♥ JJ - 「14」'You wannabe Kore... Wait, you ARE Korean' ILY <3님의 말: SDHFLKEJNFLSKH>NFSD <3333 &♥ JJ - 「14」'You wannabe Kore... Wait, you ARE Korean' ILY <3님의 말: SDJHFLKSJEHFLKJSDNFD This explains pretty much everything Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wigglelin Posted December 23, 2008 Share Posted December 23, 2008 Ohh~ i love how it's going so far. The instrumental is lovely. But yeah i know you're not finished with it and editing it and all that stuff, but as you are rapping..u are tripping a lot of words and they do sound a little awkward here and there, can't really pin point out which parts. When u edit your song...I think you should just take out some unnecessary words in there... it will definitely help so that there won't be any fumbling with the lyrics.. REMEMBER! Song Lyrics are like Poetry... See how poetry is written and use that type of technique with your song lyrics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
x3wendy Posted December 23, 2008 Author Share Posted December 23, 2008 JaeMinluvr85; yeah... i gotta re-record and re-mix everything :[ thanks<3 kAPEESH; lol WHAT?! ;o you wanna die. i'm never in the 'g' mode. you know me too well. XDD SweetsLove; i'm lazy :[ if you teach me not to be lazy, then we can talk about teaching you how to rap. ;] but then again, i'm not that good. much improvement needed. bivue; you're so silly, you dont sound mean at all! i'm still altering the lyrics at the moment, just kind of lazy to re-record and fix up everything. thanks for the support!<3 Rai-Rai; yeah, i need to fix the lyrics :[ gee wendy stinks T_T but yeah, we talked about the stuff on msn xD mizzxangie; please! angela = epic win! the lyrics are pretty corny, i hate a few a lot of the lines, but yeah like i said to the few people above, i'm still working on it. xxzone2zonexx; thanks! can't do it now, maybe later x] __Nae; o.o huh? i probably didn't know wat you were talking about. you confuse me. "essay-verses." i like that i just can't do your one word phrases. gotta make it longer, y'know? double_love123; ♥ you wigglelin; thanks for the tip. i realize i am tripping but that's either because the lyrics are weird, or im still finding my flow. i can say the lyrics in my head but when it comes down to actually rapping and recording it, i stumble. in this song, i'm mainly focused on the point, as well as using words that rhyme from the transition of one line to the next. maybe that's why it's all BLAHHH Thanks for the comments (= Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest bands182 Posted December 24, 2008 Share Posted December 24, 2008 i love the instrumental <3 i wish i could play the piano bit at the start ive not heard you sound so girly before!!! youre a rising rapper ^^ such potential <3 sorry i cant give you much critique...im a bAAAAAAAD rapper...as youll soon find out xD hahaha ;p wooooooo wendy <33 ohmgosh i love the bit where you whisper "cant seem to find!"" wahh that was awesome Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
This_1_gurl Posted December 31, 2008 Share Posted December 31, 2008 how'd you make the beat? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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