_____ Forever With You ♥♪.

[Guest SARANGHAE_.]

Big Bang Rap.

ERASED.

going to re-record taking account the constructive criticisms.

thank you everyone .

[Guest kimseo]

The rap was off-beat (I think you know that XD) and you kinda dragged the ends of the words.

It sounded too soft for rap (for the song, anyway) and you didn't really have a set rhythm.

I dunno, not to burst your bubble or hurt you in anyway, but your voice doesn't sound like it fit with the rap in the song.

It seems as if you were kinda talking it.

I also got the hint that you were pushing the emotion/you wern't feeling it. o_o

I don't know if you wanted a critique on the singing towards the end, but it was....off.

The notes wern't in tune and it sounded like moaning, in a way, no offense.

Work on scales? ^^;

Good try, though.

[Guest SARANGHAE_.]

^ hey

aw, that bad?

thanks for your critique.

yea i know my rap was offbeat.

thats why im gonna rerecord it as mentioned

and the singing.

i wasnt aiming to actually sing the last part.

i needed it to fill the blank parts.

&.. moaning?

um. i dont understand .

arent moaning sounds like "uh uh uh". i never rapped that part so.. molla (:

clarify?

thanks for your advice.

ill work on it~~~

[x3wendy]

it's not that bad. some parts of the rapping were rushed adn then slowed down. i thought the top's part of the rap was kind of messy but he says the words really faster. but it was a really nice try x] i really liked your outro though, where GD says the words ^^

[ritzy!]

it doesn't sound like you're rapping, sounds like you're talking on the phone tryna rush through a breakup or something

you got a nice voice though, smooth and .. nice. i think you're better off singing imo ..though i don't hear any singing.

[Guest]

oh wow. it's offbeat like kimseo said but i thought you did great on the rapping. i tried rapping this song and i don't even come close so i applaud you on that. keep working on it and hopefully you'll post the re-recorded one soon.

[Guest aiyashisuey]

i'll be honest.

i don't really think rap is your thing. you weren't following the beat. even though rap is kinda like talking, its not really all talking. it really sounded like you're just talking. just keep improving and im sure you'll get there =]

jia you.

[Guest SARANGHAE_.]

x3wendy

hi! i think i recognize you from YGBB? (:

thank you for your advice.

yea, top's rap was the hardest for me. soo fast x_x

i will work on it though

ritzy!

thank you for your constructive criticism!

yea, it does kinda sound like im rushing

does that mean i need more "umph" and emotion?

saolaoane

aww, thank you your so nice but apparently i didnt do a good job.

im gonna practice muchh more tehehe

aiyashisuey

thanks for replying~

i agree. but its my first time so ill definately work on it more so i can improve. ^_____^